tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-149224757183756660.post6790570898745009352..comments2024-03-28T02:15:06.910-07:00Comments on Tossing It Out: The Princess of the Plinth (Part 4-- conclusion)Arlee Birdhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11663942782929929334noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-149224757183756660.post-26357537678140510322009-12-26T20:52:10.814-08:002009-12-26T20:52:10.814-08:00Thanks for sharing the story, Lee. It's an int...Thanks for sharing the story, Lee. It's an intriguing concept, to be sure. I love how things we observe in life set off a spark in our imaginations that leads to story.<br /><br />May I make a few comments on the piece? Take my two cents for whatever they're worth, good sir, but here you go:<br /><br />1. Were I writing this, I'd raise the stakes for Maxine. Have the time on the plinth be something she <i>needs</i>. Perhaps instead of getting donations, she could sell something she really cares about to get the money to do it.<br /><br />2. I'd also think about playing on her sense of inferiority, perhaps have her arrive earlier in Trafalgar square to watch what a few other people do atop the plinth. Maybe she could second guess the whole decision after watching a couple of them.<br /><br />3. I wonder if a more pronounced change could occur at the end. Either a Joycean epiphany (a la Dubliners) or a colossal let-down. Either way, I might add some kind of life-adjusting realization at the end.<br /><br />Those are just some brief thoughts on the piece. Overall, though, I was interested to see how things turned out, so you succeeded in keeping my attention. Well done, sir.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com